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You can go no further. (Free verse) by Dovina

A vanishing point— where edges of the road you’re traveling meet and from which you can go no further. Measure the angle edge to edge, and the distance between, then figure how far you can go to where you can go no further. The higher your eye from the road, the smaller the angle, and the farther to the vanishing point. You can go no further. Clearness of air or thought help none to extend the distance. Even to the blind, the vanishing point does not draw near, and you can go no further. Another eye goes overhead, offers another view. Ask that person how far it is to the vanishing point and whether or not you can go no further.

Niphredil 9-May-06/2:24 PM
Oh, nice :-) Must have been the geometry that makes your poem so alluring at this hour.

Don't you think it might make the ending more poignant if you were to change the negative last line to a positive one - something like "whether or not you could go any further"? The comparison would strengthen the message.




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