Ranger1 May 2006

It would be unfair to try a critique of this because it's a lyric and without the music it's almost impossible to tell what the finished article is like. I will say that stanzas 7, 8 and 9 are superb and thoroughly enjoyed in their tragic glory. I'll also say that if you could iron out a couple of the somewhat cliched lines (there aren't many, 'lazy summer's day' is one though) it would be better. And I wasn't wholly enamoured of some of the word choices (the more archaic sections, for example) and sentence structures - however I fully accept that these are probably results of the form limitations and so I won't complain about them.