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Shy, quiet (Free verse) by Ranger

A cagier lightning strikes with care. Cat-like cautious side-step splits purple rolling pillow sky, clouds Swift glancing light Pause- Over ground voice, left back crackles like static, moving, catches up - hovering Turns- Moves again to find the earth has spun away

ecargo 3-Apr-06/11:54 AM
Ah, I get it. Still, if you have to explain it, that's a clue, often, that there's not enough given in the poem itself. One easy way to get that sort of double meaning across without making it too literal or obvious is to do what you did and use the title as a key--but I don't think it went far enough w/it.




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