Ranger3 Apr 2006

'Pulling out the negatives...' - good passage.
First sentence of paragraph 3 I don't like, unpleasant and somewhat cliched.
I'd replace the repeated 'teardrop', the first time you use it is fine, after that it starts to wear, and makes the piece seem like you were struggling for words.
Last line - "heaven's".
Critique aside, I enjoyed this.
'memories that I barely recognised and had no desire to recollect'...I felt that line strike.