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Behind the storm clouds, the moon consoles the sun.(edited) (Free verse) by ALChemy

Oh morning girl, let your tears fall. Though mother sky and father light are engaged in such a turbulent fight I will hold you safe by day or night, through thunder and through squall, through whatever fates befall. Come, ride on my shoulders Sunshine. Let us play in the midst of the rain. Let us ride out the storm and in time Let love and smiles heal pain.

drnick 29-Mar-06/9:51 PM
I am confused as to what is going on here...the mother is the sky, and the father is light? Your niece is a source of her father? I like the thought here, I think you have a good idea, but I would suggest reworking the comparisons.




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