poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on Behind the storm clouds, the moon consoles the sun.(edited) by ALChemy.

Dovina29 Mar 2006

The problem with tweaking the ending is that I would not have known the sun is the child, or that the moon is you, without your explanation. Therefore, I would not have known anything about the child, whether she was happy, sad, smiling, except for what the last line says. From tht unknowing position, it could go either way.