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The Ocean (Haiku) by Fayt

Salty ocean waves, Always moving with the wind, Bringing life to all.

Silverjackel 18-Mar-06/7:57 PM
The only problem I have with it is it is an incomplete sentence, "bringing" being in the present tense form. You might try:
Gentle ocean waves,
Always moving with the wind
Breathe a life to all
But I'm not trying to write it for you. In fact, I don't really like what I wrote either X(




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