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We Do Not Write About (Free verse) by faithmairee

we do not write about what we do not know the so-called visionaries in a frantic world savoring chances taken mourning lost opportunities advancing with unmatched passion a mere reflection of our double-life we do not write about what we do not know but of the esoteric world inside our heads of displaced bullets or the bothersome sometimes bull-headed black holes in our souls we do not write about what we do not know but of pain and suffering or pleasure (possibly pure ecstasy) and sometimes someone listens to the stirrings of our souls

Dovina 13-Mar-06/8:10 AM
I think it would be stronger using "I" instead of "we." Some people do write of what they don't know. To say that you do not, is really the only thing you can say.




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