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The Ocean (Haiku) by Fayt

Salty ocean waves, Always moving with the wind, Bringing life to all.

ALChemy 6-Mar-06/9:19 AM
Unless the ocean's name is "Sweet" I suggest losing the possesive form. While your at it change "Sweet" to something else. The ocean's not sweet it's salty. What's with all the caps in the first line.




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