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Watercolor Fairy (Free verse) by Scarlett

(one I wrote a while ago) Tesa takes flight, no time to tarry An artist song she serenades Not with voice, but by flutter Wings whistle, watercolor cascades Around the painting, blessings she bequeaths Delineating colors, running free By splashes of rain droplets from her eyes Hues battle for territory From a tiny bag of glitter, she sprinkles salt to texturize, with a lilting laugh, out forms a rainbow pallet, crystallized a brush of ultramarine blue she spins the color wheel to blend soft wash of Indian yellow a dance of magenta and alizarin Dashing across the paper Iridescent her gown flows She settled, a dew upon a petal To dry with a kiss she blows Tesa only appears at twilight Elfish ears and dreamy eyes To transform the artist efforts The morning brings her sweet surprise

Ranger 21-Feb-06/8:18 AM
Nice, made me think of the children's story about the elves and the shoemaker, I think. It was a shoemaker, wasn't it? Anyway. Not only do I see the fairy in this dancing round the picture, I also see the artist doing the same during the day - Tesa could easily be a small child as well, giving the picture the sort of imagination that only childhood can (does that make sense?) I love the idea of hues battling for territory, although I'm not sure that 'battle' fits the feel of this piece - maybe something like 'jostle' would work better? Also I'd change 'a dew' to 'like dew' - or even just get leave out 'a'.
You get the imagery spot on here.




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