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cryogenicide necrobot (Free verse) by baphomet

past i wish i was their, then i use to care. beware, be careful. preasent there i wish i was, till then i'll care. my future seems amyst amoung the hung and lynched. not knowing hurts like no other. i wish i had an older brother. leather wet throat drie and strept. i wish he would teach preach so i can leach like squire because you once inspired. now i wander wander around lost in the mist dry ice that smokes when i hit. lit i became, quick me wick was put to shame. it was a nightmare i lived on elm st. naw it was o.k. staying up alnight and slept alday. add ick in to my addiction if cant handle the heat get ou of the kitchen so i did i jumped in the freezer now im 17 i look and feel like a geezer. my girl was adena tina. she was swell, the swelliest of all. but then i met sadie who stoll my last ball. again again and AGAIN i never left tina i never left sadie both lived with me sadie reported a baby right be fore i left to califo ni a for a nice detox 2 day stay. when i came back tina was gone sadie took her away shit hit the fan so i scraped the blades which i stuck in my pipe and a puddle was made. sadie miscareeged just like she said i cheat while ur gone and the baby is dead with who i said with someone you know. since tina left i left too i traded my body too but the smile i seen on your face jeffrey made up for the times i cheated on you. i didnt for dugs im sorry. but baby will you still marry me, ofcouse you fool im alfucked in the head as you can till from what youve read i wish iwas dead i wish she was dead but i am to weak to put lead in my head. but now i wander wander around lost, blind and in denial i want to be free with sadie, i dont know if i can im so sorry. but i will try try and try agian. i ruined my life just for YOU. I RAN AWAY now for you to too.

Ranger 9-Feb-06/6:46 AM
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