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no title (Free verse) by candaliesa

were have you gone? were could you be? the light is gone, i can not see. you are no- longer by my side, without you here my soul has died. i miss your smile, your gentle touch, i can't believe i miss you this much. i miss you more than words can say, i long for you more and more each day. why don't you come and kiss me goodnight? or better yet hold me until morning light. stay with me till there is no more moon, then come back to me so very soon. alone and sad when your not here remembering how it felt to have you near. come back to me someway somehow find your way back to me. Please come now!! i love you more than words can say, i'll swear it now, and until my ending day!! ---cmr--- 6/10/2002

cyan9 9-Dec-05/3:18 AM
morose with improved potency from the use of melodramatic cliche's. The rhyme was nice and it made a pleasurable read. You presented a common theme here, and you presented it well, but you did nothing to it, there was nothing new here, no inticacies (unless I am missing something) and so I can only rate it a -7-.




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