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trully, madly, deeply (Free verse) by Blindpoetry

I'm a stranger to this sound I'm a stranger to this beat I'm a stranger to this dance When will you believe me? I don't know if you can hear me I'm really a new man Your a beautiful woman I'm saying I'm sorry I forgot how to read Your lips are to tight I know it's my fault I'll shut up and give you a good night Did you forget about me? Wonder where I was? Did you lose me in the dark? Are your eyes filled with puss? I'm the grain of sand Locked in the car Your the sun burning me I gotta get out and run for you Trully, madly, deeply in love Cliche goodness, embracing me with what it does Forgeting, remembering, focusing on you Do you wonder what we were? Because I'm in the past Ok, Forget about the future Forget about the past Just stay with the today Remember to never 'member.

Bhaskaryya 10-Nov-05/7:07 PM
"Your lips are TOO* tight"

Anyway this has a lyrical feel to it and could work if put to some music. Needs a bit tweaking here and there I believe.




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