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Eternity (Free verse) by Dovina

What shall I do After I die? Newport Shores? A lot with a view? Close to Fashion Island? As in real estate It’s location location location Her condition’s going down I heard them say But the opposite is true Strength and vigor exhausted A good sign Draws a satisfying vision Up to Mt. Nebo I’ll go No earthly Canaan for me Upward, onward!

ALChemy 25-Oct-05/6:29 AM
If "But the opposite is true" refers to "It’s location location location" then bravo. If it refers to "Her condition’s going down" than BOO! It's the meat of a contradiction sandwich because you follow with -"Strength and vigor exhausted". I know you're taking what the doctors are saying out of context but it's a bit confusing. Did you write this in MS Word because all the first letters in each line are capitalized.

Interesting point of view. Optimistic, no sense of dread what-so-ever.




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