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It’s getting dark (Other) by Prince of Void

But poetry of imagery could fill my sight Take me for awhile to my own ecstasy My eyes will drown in shots stand side by side Each cut cuts the frame of my life Edited slowly into other side Making sign of the God in myself Faded mysteriously overnight Come back to the scene of The moment still wonders And taste the pain and enjoys They are dissolving Upon the shade of a eye Then fading into the light It’s getting dark

Niphredil 15-Oct-05/4:42 PM
I really don't know what you are trying to say in this poem, sorry.
On a more practical note - I find the 'But' at the beginning quite awkward.




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