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Thinkin! (Free verse) by KezzY20

Just sitting here and thinking, Thinking my thoughts of you Dreaming of how things would be If you were right here too. I hope that things are going The way that you had planned I only wish that you were here And I could hold your hand I dream of being with you Of being by your side Of waking up beside you Of love that we won't hide I hope one day that you'll be more Than just a dream at night That I can bring you happiness And love with all my might But until then, I'm here alone There's nothing else to do Than dream of you and count the days Until I'm there with you

god'swife 3-Sep-02/9:36 AM
Oh my goodness. Mother goose is more poetry then this. 90% of this poem is either a preposition or a pronoun. Try adjectives, adverbs, nouns.




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