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Drops of Pain (Lyric) by PoeticOne

This is how I feel after a crappy day I’m not used to having more lows than ups But I guess that I need to get used to those Before I start feeling even worse, even worse Drops of pain Slowly going down my face Hide now between the usual November rains And I feel like the world is going to end Oh how I wish to live back on those happy days Back when everything felt ok Back when I didn’t feel this pain When I wasn’t part of this living hell When I didn’t had to play the game So I will get rid of every single thing That makes me feel like crap That slowly took the happiness out of my life Drops of pain Slowly going down my face Hide now between the usual November rain And I feel like the world is going to end Oh how I wish to live back on those happy days Back when everything felt ok Sometimes I believe that is too late That my life my will never change That I will never find happiness again That’s when I realize that those days will never return

pennymarie 3-Aug-05/11:39 PM
I like the general concept.. maybe just look it over again and see if you can wrap it up and put some finishing touches on this master piece.... peace
Penny




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