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The Shape of Shadows (Lyric) by MacFrantic

V1: Inside of us all A lingering loneliness After the fall I'm sure it will find us Of this I'm... Breaking away Finding a darker place Finding some shade where I can Rest my head and rest my anger Chorus: You know it's true The truth that makes my blood turn black You know it's true And if I could I'd give the truth right back Finding all the broken corners Where you left us all behind To save yourself From the darkness The shape of shadows in your mind V2: Lead me today Follow the road that cuts my heels Far and away I'm sure we'll escape now Of this I'm... Lying in silence Fearful of sight and pain Finding the point where all these Ghosts came from to walk in my dreams -:Solo:- Chorus:

pennymarie 1-Aug-05/11:47 AM
I really really like this

V1:
Inside of us all
A lingering loneliness

After the fall
I'm sure it will find us
Of this I'm...

Breaking away
Finding a darker place [FINDING A DARKENED PLACE]

Finding some shade where I can
Rest my head and rest my anger

Chorus:
You know it's true
The truth that makes my blood turn black

You know it's true
And if I could I'd give the truth right back [I LOVE THESE 2]

Finding all the broken corners
Where you left us all behind
To save yourself
From the darkness

The shape of shadows in your mind

V2:
Lead me today
Follow the road that cuts my heels

Far and away
I'm sure we'll escape now
Of this I'm...

Lying in silence
Fearful of sight and pain[FEARFUL OF MY INVASIVE PAIN]

Finding the point where all these
Ghosts came from to walk in my dreams [ THIS NEEDS A LITTLE WORK IT DOESN'T FLOW WELL]
SEARCHING FOR THE POINT,
ALL THESE GHOSTS INVADED OR CRASHED MY DREAMS

hope I could help.. this was very good
Penny





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