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A Good Man Ruined (Free verse) by Dovina

Working alone, the ace engineer gets it down. Like an artist of few mistakes, he conceives, births practical designs, buildable, awesome. Promoted and monied, he runs a team and thinks he can run the world. Off for himself now, fumbling, failing, fanatical, driving nails in what he could have designed, still unaware. It's the fault of a woman draftsman, he's told, but he knows it's his own damn fault.

zodiac 26-Jul-05/1:03 AM
Are you drunk?

From the POV of Jimmy Buffet's song, the only people who don't know by the end of the song are the "some people" who claim it's the fault of a woman. From the POV of your poem, the only people who don't know are the people who "told" him it's woman's fault. Still not seeing the difference.

None of the rest of your comment comes across in the poem. So whether it rings with me is kind of immaterial. I think most of your commenters would agree.




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