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A Good Man Ruined (Free verse) by Dovina

Working alone, the ace engineer gets it down. Like an artist of few mistakes, he conceives, births practical designs, buildable, awesome. Promoted and monied, he runs a team and thinks he can run the world. Off for himself now, fumbling, failing, fanatical, driving nails in what he could have designed, still unaware. It's the fault of a woman draftsman, he's told, but he knows it's his own damn fault.

Dovina 22-Jul-05/8:22 AM
"then promoted and monied he runs a team" is clearer, might do that.

The 'damn' is shakey, I know.

I never thought of it as being about God, but in a way it works if you think of it as man created in God's image as creator.

Thanks for the comment.




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