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Almost Persuaded (Free verse) by Dovina

While we’re sleeping something’s keeping the world spinning uniformity winning While we’re dueling for knowledge drooling something’s ambling comfortably ruling Something sensible? Responsible? Reprehensible!

darby pyn 7-Jul-05/3:46 PM
the title seems to imply it's about
someone persuading another into having sex.
it's ok.... but a little mechanical.
it needs more emotion.
just my opinion.




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