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If I'd Never (Free verse) by PawnedTidal

If I'd never felt Your gentle touch, Maybe being apart Wouldn't hurt so much. When I was with you, There was nothing else. But now I'm left here, All by myself. If I'd never kissed Your sweet, soft lips, Maybe I wouldn't feel Quite so alone like this. I knew the day would come When you would say good-bye. But I never dreamed How much it would make me cry. If I'd never fallen asleep Staring into your beautiful face, Maybe I wouldn't be longing For your warm embrace. Even though you're only A few hours away, Every second seems like Forever and a day. If I'd never held you Tightly in my arms, Maybe I wouldn't be So mesmerized by your many charms. It won't be long Until I can see you again. I hope it can be Just like it was then. If I'd never met you... If I'd never loved you... I'm glad I'll never have to know Just what I'd do.

livingcanvas 1-Sep-02/9:24 PM
well written. personally, i think there are too many "if i'd nevers", but i just think that it kind of jumps from thought to thought. but very good job none the less. the last stanza is very strong, you ended on a very wonderful point.




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