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-750,000 in Rwanda (Free verse) by ALChemy

See how the Tutsi sleep dead in heaps and still they lie there where they die. Too many for the census takers, calculators, estimators. Too many for the senses to take. Hear our silence serenade the merciless raid. The order's called. The triggers pulled. The flash, the bang, the flesh explodes. and in the air the smell still hangs of a rotting sweetness in churches and streets. wreaking our futures bleakness Touch the ground unsettled ground desecration abound There are more bodies than bullet shells stabbing children snapping thier necks. Save the bullets for mom and dad. Kids are easier to kill.

ALChemy 7-Jun-05/6:52 PM
I think you might be right about the last verse.
It was a bad Idea to drop pop culture into this and the shame on you message is redundant.
The second verse was intended to point out the rest of the worlds ignorance to what was going on but I think I can change the last part a little to add to my point.
But I'll have to work on that later.




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