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Lower than low (Lyric) by nicole081083

Seems like just yesterday I was consumed by sin And I knew there was no way Into heaven I'd get in At that point I was so low Lower than I'd been before And I didn't say no When Jesus knocked on my door I was lower than low Now I'm higher than high Since my savior took control I have a new home in the sky Won't have to worry anymore About which way to go So glad I opened that door When I was lower than low It's a brand new day And I'm doing just fine And I'll never turn away From that savior of mine No matter how hard satan tries To tempt me to sin I won't believe his lies I won't let him in Now listen to me friend When you're down and out Know that this is not the end There is no doubt Ya just need to pray For all of your sins Then they'll be washed away And you'll be born again Cuz you were lower than low Now you're higher than high Since Jesus took control You have a new home in the sky Won't have to worry anymore About which way to go Aren't ya glad you opened that door When you were lower than low

sliver 26-May-05/8:48 PM
I would say 'that heaven let me in' in the first stanza. See how it flows better that way? A few other spots that seem to bog down a bit. A positive message, but I think you need repentance, also, for that forgiveness.




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