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Returning (Free verse) by Dovina

Embers of burned out nights still glow between us while old dust gathers 'round our feet years since I danced with you in that young ballroom tonight so pensive, philosophical that room seems a former life Back hurting, heart recluse it's a matter of indifference reincarnation, I think to a lesser karma Hospital visits replace bedroom visits expensive restaurants for sack lunches It's not that I've given up on love it's just another kind – less passionate, more soulish happy with someone who's done the miles opened his once-closed mind and might even, before its too late his heart too

Dovina 30-Apr-05/6:36 AM
We have different criteria for judging goodness, or best. I did not really mean that my formatic, but senseless "Paradelle of Progress" was my best, only that you might think it so because of form. What you say here about good rhymes and not contradicting yourself, confirms that your concern is form while mine is content.




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