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Untitled (Free verse) by nothingtoanyone

Wrapped up in you is where I cry Waters of blue, sapphire sky Wrapped up in you is where I hide Washed read, with the dying tide Trapped in me is were I Lie Bruised black, my lowest high Wait for me.I'll wait for you.If not the moon won't rise. Wrapped up in you is where I die Darkened yellow, tie me high Wrapped in you is were I find Frightened fear, inside my mind Trapped in me is were I fall Fare and hard,stapled to the wall

jessicazee 27-Apr-05/1:05 AM
Love "darkened yellow". Wished you could stray from "cry" and "high" rhyme scheme, but still was pulled in by beautiful line geometry anyhoo....8.3




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