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Moments (or) Suicide (Free verse) by Dovina

I made a list as you could do of ten events so brief, profound they rest as Moments vividly recorded for a Moment cannot be mundane Seven remain as wonderful three as terrible. If the list continued I’d like to think seventy percent could be maintained as great My life reviewed and judged like this might be considered in some dark hour not just bunk, but as in this ordinary time for its just worth

zodiac 9-Apr-05/10:21 PM
Better grammatically.

Except I don't think it's a just worth. Still, you've dealt with that well enough; the narrator's obviously supposed to be a suicidal loser.




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