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Moments (or) Suicide (Free verse) by Dovina

I made a list as you could do of ten events so brief, profound they rest as Moments vividly recorded for a Moment cannot be mundane Seven remain as wonderful three as terrible. If the list continued I’d like to think seventy percent could be maintained as great My life reviewed and judged like this might be considered in some dark hour not just bunk, but as in this ordinary time for its just worth

zodiac 7-Apr-05/6:03 AM
By the last "evaluation", do you mean something like "value" or "worth"?

If so (and that's not at all clear) maybe it would be better to use the word "valuation" instead.

PS-I don't see why you don't have to judge your life by all the times that weren't Moments. I imagine if I were some total slob with no Moments except for achieving a single spectacular "arrival", which also happened to kill me. Would I go to heaven?




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