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Holding The Ground (Lyric) by Miggy

I’m feeling crowded now Ideas barge in somehow But none could tell me how To heal the pain Need to get this right Before I lose the fight Beginning to be like A world of shame (Chorus) Honor we shall save When we defend Cause all of goodness Will win out in the end Even though it feels so cold so suddenly We will shine as proud as we can go on through anything I hear the families mourn The evil laughs with scorn My face falls to the floor So painfully Bullets pierce the skin Vision’s getting dim But I can’t give in This quietly (Chorus) Fighting for brightness of the day Weakness won’t ever make the grade Making sure the world will spin yet once again Heroes to whom children will pretend (Chorus/Ending)

luzrheroguy 30-Mar-05/11:10 PM
Apparently I'm not the only one who writes about superheroes. Well done. Beginning could use some rewriting but the rest was well done. -9-




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