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A Time (Free verse) by DevilBuni

Once there was a time, When you loved me. A time where I had your support And I could do no wrong. Once there was a time When I was happy; Where a smile wasn't uncommon But it has been so long. Now it is a time Of heartbreak and hurt, When I cry more than smile, And the sorrow I feel is strong. Now it is a time Where you lost yourself Inside of the stranger That has nowhere to belong. I wish for a time Where I find what I lost; The person who means most Who sang me that song. I wish for a time When I can smile again, But without you Im empty And the life I live is wrong.

Dovina 3-Mar-05/6:59 AM
I agree. Verse 4 has potential - could become the poem.




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