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The Voice (Free verse) by jroday

A voice told me one day. Keep the faith! Don't give up! Some days I want to throw my hands up!! Been close to Death. Some people don't understand, there's a reason why I sing. There's a reason why my smile hides, those distant cries. If you look close into my eyes, my eyes will tell you a story. I did'nt have a life of glory. Been in love, been alone, but I'm still the same. Sunshine and faith keeps me going day to day, and when those dark clouds come. I sing my song, yesterday is gone. Got to live for today. Ignorance makes me strong. Negativity sneaks. Creativity peaks and faith rules, everyone has there time to shine. I'm just waiting on mine...

Bhaskaryya 25-Feb-05/9:54 PM
Has a lyrical rhythm to it and I wonder if this would do better as lyrics rather than free verse poem, due to some inconsistency in line breaks and rhyme schemes.

It was an enjoyable read nonetheless and the matter was great.

Verdict: Beautiful!




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