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Resurrection (Free verse) by Dreammaker1024

Sweet everlasting dreams have awakened the memories of first time butterflies. Loving the ideal has made the building of us so much more. Take away nativity and make this body yours ‘til forever turns into never. Life was never as luscious ‘til that first embrace of entwined limbs and connected lips. Weakened by your taste, aroused by the newly formed light has made this midnight a lamp unto the darkened soul within. Longing for time to stop so I can stay held in your embrace, just like this, for all eternity. Past heartaches make it tough for trust to grow for I fear that the moment we disconnect from each others arms is the same moment you will leave me forever. Love this strong can cause suffering so deep and thinking of my life without you is that sharp pain un-relieving in my heart. The way I feel for you is indescribable and that is how I want it to everlastingly be, you and me together for always. All past hurt and fears must flee so that this dream will be my reality without shadows, and all the love I feel emitted from you into my life is the greatest weapon of warfare I hold.

Shuushin 23-Jan-05/6:05 PM
Intrigued at first by the style. But this has a teen-angst thesaurized feel to it, still.

"emitted"?

I do like this though: "Weakened by your taste, aroused by the newly
formed light has made this midnight a lamp unto the darkened soul within"

gotta say.




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