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Cigarettes and Masturbation (Free verse) by Lifeboatman

What has the world come to When a decent man smokes flat cigarettes And poetry is reduced to a General Surgeon's warning The cogitation of lost sperm had spurned lucidity And a humble man's promise is lost to us forever Ozone-scented thunder wakes us up to momentary grandeur But ceases its effects as soon as impact is met Then we are back again And not so much by apathy but by indifference Thus the sperm kept alive exists in vain And the memory of the promise fades As rain, pacified by toxicity, drowns out its music Music that the people had the audacity to replace With digestive bi-products recurring last farewells

MacFrantic 5-Jan-05/10:10 PM
Apathy:

Lack of interest or concern, especially regarding matters of general importance or appeal; indifference.

Still a good poem, regardless. I still can't believe I took time to inspect your faulty contradiction by way of thesaurus. *8*

P.S.

Indifference:

apathy demonstrated by an absence of emotional reactions

P.P.S. I am a f**king loser.




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