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Mystery Stranger (Acrostic) by Zalev

Incredibly you appeared when I needed you the most. And somehow I still don't know who you are? My mind wonders, and my heart hurts without you. Tell me you will stay with me forever. Hold me in your arms my lord. Every day, and especially at night. Deliver me from all this pain and sorrow. Empty my heart from it's doubts. Viciously strip me of all my bad memories. I love you mystery stranger. Let me live under the protection of your wings.

Shuushin 4-Jan-05/8:42 AM
capitalize "[L]ord", I think.

Another unforced acrostic, nice - though I liked the other better (this one has a less flowing feel; more list-like, which is especially bad in an acrostic).





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