poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on Pinhole by Dovina.

Dan garcia-Black18 Dec 2004

I see where you're going with this poem. I think you could do better if you would rewrite the last two stanzas. You should let go of the uncertainty in the 4th stanza and wrap it up positively in the 5th. So, 'til then a -9- not a -10-.