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Yesterday I cried (Free verse) by 1Sapphire1

Yesterday I cried & on the day before also. I wore sunglasses on one of the darkest days in Colorado but I couldn't hide the tears streaming down my face as I walked among strangers. Your memorial shall remain in the hearts that you have touched rather than near the vehicle that blossoms in your name among cranes & columbines. If your children still want to enter this fierce world, they will have to find another way. The hands of cowards have placed you into the presence of God. Go now & spread your wings. See splendid sights that are beyond the realm of humankind. Make miracles happen. For now I will continue to cry. Not for you but for me because I can never meet you; the actress, the sister, the daughter.... perhaps as the angel?

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 26-Aug-02/5:15 PM
I don't know what naughty religion you're from, but in the kingdom of Jesu, dead people don't turn into angels. I also think that you have substituted bland sentimentality for actual content. There is too much exposition and not enough evocation. But hey, that's just my opinion! I would never try to tell you what to do! Probably, I just don't understand! Have a great one! 10/10!!!




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