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Free (Free verse) by TLRufener

I’ve stayed behind you, Held my silence for too many years; Never once stood up for myself And I’ve cried too many tears. I owe all of this to you; You have had your last moment to shine. I’m about to turn you loose. Vengeance will be mine! All of you lies have torn down the world. You’ve crushed me time and again. I’ve had it with your treachery. It’s time for you to taste the pain. The storm clouds are coming back. This time I have the crown. I make the rules this time. Now I’m throwing you down. You always said that you were right. Everyone knew that I was wrong. Soon they’ll know all the secrets; Your hold over them will be gone. I’ve gotten up from the dirt And brushed off my perfect clothes. I’m taking back my perfect life; Now you will be the one left alone. The tables have been turned on you. I’m the one who landed on my feet. Your hands will be vacant of action For you will no longer have me to beat. The door and I have made a deal; It will block your path from me. Never again will you ever see my face. This time I’m the one who is free!

arduinn 20-Oct-04/7:34 PM
I like.

I think the first line from the second stanza should be 'your'.. And the bit about 'Everyone knew that I was wrong'.. Well, shouldn't it be 'thought'? That's just what I think.. Don't change if you think you're right.. k..




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