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One True Instant (Free verse) by Dovina

Directly in front of me the one I call husband Our eyes meet for one true and necessary instant Then turning away as a stranger does back to his life’s recesses Those places I have not been and will never be invited The taut lean torso a silhouette in my doorway The sure hope of his shoulders standing inert

zodiac 11-Oct-04/4:10 AM
Who said I spent any time on it? Oh, you did.

Dim response. PS-your third stanza is very poorly (and superungrammatically) phrased. See if you can find out why.




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