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Surfer (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

Hunkers and leans arms outstreched into a torso twist then a hipflickheelturn and caress the alluring blue curling sheet then washed away in his own name.

INTRANSIT 28-Aug-04/10:22 AM
Thanks guys. Had to edit. The opening line didn't jive with the closer. Had to make him more active.




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