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May Monday Explanation
(
Free verse
) by
MacFrantic
Arriving noon on train eleven Standing silent in the rain Downing doses of western medicine I can't be too late today Or too sober But in of itself this moment Is making my mind erode And by the way I'm not sorry Not in the least
Dovina
2-Aug-04/1:50 PM
The first 5 lines are good. Could end it right there.
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