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May Monday Explanation (Free verse) by MacFrantic

Arriving noon on train eleven Standing silent in the rain Downing doses of western medicine I can't be too late today Or too sober But in of itself this moment Is making my mind erode And by the way I'm not sorry Not in the least

Dovina 2-Aug-04/1:50 PM
The first 5 lines are good. Could end it right there.




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