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Brats
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Free verse
) by
D. $ Fontera
He, brat Sleep so sound Living on the softer ground She, brat Look so keen Living in a toy machine You, brat Mind so bright Living one more day to fight We, brats Speak so proud Living lost within the crowd
Shuushin
27-Jul-04/11:00 AM
pretty catchy, really. I think the last stanza brings it down a notch though. What else might go there?
a fun piece.
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