poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on The Ladies and the Bum by Dovina.

Shuushin10 Jul 2004

try: "(I usually spend the night there)"

"but strong to pull up her" is awkward, D. Is the lawn powerful enought to earn a capital?

"if she leaves it unsecured" can go.

Interesting stacato cadence - intentional?