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Charming Distraction ( The Day I Put My Socks On Backwards) (Free verse) by MacFrantic

It is actually quite difficult to walk on the sun get a definite answer or put your pants on two legs at a time But then again you're not like everyone else Today you woke up on the best side of the bed because it's not every day that you sleep on the floor Anticipation is a funny thing but she must be lying when she says to her friends He's not a flirt only a charming distraction Tomorrow methinks you should try calling her on a rotary phone because it is much more satisfying

Shuushin 3-Jul-04/8:26 AM
rotary phone is a nice touch.

I've been critiqued for my line breaks recently, but some of these give me pause. If no one else says anything then its just me.




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