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What's Poetry (Free verse) by Sasha

What’s poetry? Ask Bécquer and he’ll tell you: «¿Qué es poesía? ¿Y tú me lo preguntas? Poesía... eres tú.» So it’s all you... All somewhat whisky, won’t apply at all If I don’t know who or what you is. See, poems Are things as real as rain or fake as rainbows, And sound that moves low down upon the tongue Or high, ethereal as a tweet in trees. The sound, the slide and touch of tongue to tooth. Yes, tongues like those for love (and not for talking Since love’s a wisky labial off the mouth) But not for yous that fade away like the Fake peepshow picaros for circus bucks. Things. Things like Rilke’s Dinge or the Panther Dessen Blick ist vom Vorübergehen der Stäbe so müd geworden, daß er nichts mehr hält. Dem ist, als ob es tausend Stäbe gäbe und hinter tausend Stäben keine Welt. (Whose gaze has gone so weary from the passing Of bars that it no longer holds a bond, To whom it seems a thousand bars are massing, And in their thousand show no world beyond) No world, behind the bars- there’s not a form. And form’s the thing of all: rien que la nuance Take form away, no thing is left: sheer nothing. So keep your “why don’t you...”s and do your thing. Such things out-thing and outthink things we think Throw us for roller-coaster loopdeeloops Right sideways, upside down (cerebral pressure Perpetually strained: Danger of concussion) Yet sound still echos and resounds upon The tongue, words brighten round and we can see The rutilant shadow of leaves against the grass When sunset speaks her breath on my bare tongue No sense need come, when we can speak the names That objects are: A growl of uvular French’s "L’insecte net gratte la sécheresse," And curt cicadas grate the bone-dry air As what we said.Wind pulsing in the pines As drowsy dawn rose, blonde with a thousand roses, Said words in thousands, to hie and sigh the time When oceans, trees, and animals would rhyme. Ask Ginsberg- he won’t answer, he’ll just spew you Detritus from KABOOMs of diatribes On generations, angels, and mary jane, As meaningless as that. Don’t dare ask Byron Or "love" and "kiss" and "moon" and (rhyming) "bliss" Will infect the response, and viral verse Will pour in you as well. Don’t ask, for your sake. Nims doesen’t know. Don’t bother, he cares too much For crystals and observatory odes. But you asked me. So what’s my answer? This.

SupremeDreamer 19-Jun-04/10:50 PM
This poem is the kind of thing that causes me to tremble in angst and the fear that a poet hides in the shadows, praying that the sun never never rises from its mountain-crook.

It's amazingly bloated, and I know a lot about using mind-blowing padding--
that's how I've managed to effectively irritate rankerfolk, by piling on meaningless
candy-coated, poisoned bullshit and slapping a title on it-- the kind of shit that
cause most sane folks to take up a hobby, like genocide, for instance.

"as real as rain or fake as rainbows,"

Ok, when someone says something is as real as the rain, their usually teenagers
that are going for the slightly uplifting average of a C+ in english class. As for rainbows?
I have a bias, a tick you could say:

Whenever someone mentions rainbows in a poem, I have to try very very hard to stifle the puke
rising up my throat so that it doesn't become air-born with extreme velocity. Never mind the murderous rage that accompanies the over-all sensation. Fuck skittles, you get what I'm sayin?

Oh, and the german, french, spanish, martian garble, etc, is well, fucking annoying and seems like an attempt to drown your "poem" in eloquent riddles that mean nothing. That, or it's a clever ploy dreamed up by a twisted freak of a jester to instill frustration and confusion among rankerfolk.--
never mind the multi-lingual blither, we still need to figure out what the fuck your rambling on about in english.

Almost nothing in your poem (written during a fit of lunacy, or an encounter with jack daniels) relates to each other-- most of it is just dull imagery mixed with elaborate vocabulary that makes my adventures with a thesaurus look like a cruise across the Pacific Ocean, with volcano hiking in Hawaii as the vacation special.

We de have a vague notion though, a glimmer of the frail innuendo-- (yeah, I'm good with the fecal gilding aren't I??) supposedly your yappin about what poetry (to you and whatever party you belong to) is, what it means, it's purpose, and ???

you didn't seem to have time to really get into a subtopic.. wait, did you even keep to the topic? oh, yes, barely, your hate of poor Ginsberg seemed to snap you out of the shit-trace to make a pathetic closing that barely connected with what you began with.

Maybe, if you had a sense of humor, you would of drawn an ascii picture of a gun after the last lines, or maybe a knife, or-- even better-- a needle, for example:



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But you asked me. So what’s my answer? This:

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***HEROIN & SPEED MIXED WITH PROZAC***

(and freud would cry, jung would sigh, pharmaceutical companies would celebrate
as we all bask in the age of chemical therapy.)
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That's my take on it... I know you won't like my reaction, my comment, my arrogance,
my brash bitter humor or the sarcastic irony that pours out from me, BUT!!!
never-the-less i am compelled to dish it out, much like a lawyer delivering ones divorce papers with anthrax soon mistaken for cocaine. Its ok to be insane, its ok, its ok, I FEEL YOUR PAIN.
Good day.

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