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Serendipity (Free verse) by cuddlytiger17

Thoughts rushing through my mind Answers I need to find A reason without fault To unlock this forbidden vault Full of fears and pain galore So helpless wanting nothing more Hiding within the depths of unhappiness Fully knowing the risks of this But unable to break away So scared that I must stay Petrified to transform But sick of being so forlorn Torn between both worlds I live But unwilling to give in I walk the ropes of sanity Lacking any potential vanity Engulfed in terror here I stand Longing for a helping hand But incapable of such a request Losing myself in this vast mess Hanging on by one last thread Dreams exploding in my head Thoughts combining into one This night is nearly done But one last thing I do inquire As the night feasts upon my desire I ask that no one show me any pity And that my life be left to serendipity.

zodiac 10-May-04/4:07 AM
I disagree with hypatia. I find the rhymes here sublime, though pity/serendipity did feel rather like throwing myself at a full run into the back of a parked Dodge Dart.




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