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deviant conveniences (Free verse) by J.B. Manning

We had unprotected sex Knowing you’re infected Your cum-fungus blistered my flesh On contact Memories of you resonate in my mind Like water on windows Certainty fades like Daylight and looking back is easy…fore-site blinding Love is addictive and I’m broken I want to Tie your pubic hair in knots and hang you on your contemplation Every time You say goodbye.

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 5-May-04/9:57 AM
No, the real problem starts with colons like you. You are unwilling or unable to develop an argument beyond one or two mystical lines which are too vague to be properly argued about, so you just sprinkle as many of these about as possible. Please stop.




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