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For Kristen (Villanelle) by thepinkbunnyofdoom Dry your whining eyes Kristen
You just have to keep in mind
Broken hearts do mend
Forget the words of your ex-boyfriend
Itâs obvious that he is blind
Dry your whining eyes Kristen
He still plays those same ole games he has always been
If you merely look Iâm sure youâll find
Broken hearts do mend
Crying tears for him should be a sin
Donât let yourself be swallowed by his kind
Dry your whining eyes Kristen
Please donât lose your faith in men
Leave him and those wasted tears behind
Broken hearts do mend
Don't let that fool make you forsake mankind
So rewind your hate for men and let your heart touch my mind
Dry your whining eyes Kristen
Broken hearts do mend
Up the ladder:
The Ode of Human Life
Down the ladder:
Of Fortunes and The Future
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Posted: April 7, 2003 4:55 PM PDT; Last modified: April 7, 2003 6:39 PM PDTWeighted score: 6.7097826 Overall Rank: 494 Comments:
here. don't say i never did nothing for you.
Yeah along those lines
Quite sweet. What did you do with yourself before u were on this site btw?
Before I found this site I was just writing poems and drawing in class. I started writing as a way to express my anger(and clear my head of all my problems) and slowly found my way to move beyond just writing whenever I was pist. The first poem I ever wrote was mom and dad and that started off as Just a song I'd play when my parents pist me off. Then I got into writing Lyrics and got a band together. My friend Lindsey asked to see what I was writing one day in class and she loved what she read. She said I should try and get published but I realised that I'm not that skilled yet. So one day after a really bad break up I decided that it was time to start sharing my poems and I looked on a search engine for a site where I could submit poetry. I found this one and its free and I liked the Idea of ratings and Letting other people post comments about what you write so here I am. Other than Playing guitar, having fun being moronic and writing poems, I also Study film making, Audio production, and Do a radio shift for whss 89.5 and Thats where I first started using the pink fluffy bunny rabbit of doom as my on-air name and then because that was too long here I cut it down to thepinkbunnyofdoom. How bout you?
I just asked because its obvious u spend alot of time on this site! (its a decent site i would too if i had the time!) im at college with about half the people on this site -devosky (cannot spell it!), t'ien, bobjim, MuDeNve, ranger, blade, cleverdevice, yardbird etc! thats how i know about this site - i never thought i could write poetry until this site and its made me see some of my friends in a really different light coz ppl write things on here theyd never say! Ive noticed there are not very many females though and everyone seems to be gay!oh well i guess what poetry does to you x
I don't know about the number of females here or most peoples sexuality but I do see your point about being able to write things you'd never be able to say. The reason I'm on so much is that I come home from school Talk on my Instant messanger for awhile and check my email. Then If I'm bored I goto my favorites sites Newgrounds.com and Poemranker.com(I'm bored alot).
Hehe college is so much work im doing chemistry at the moment its 10.30pm and im no where near finished so im on poemranker! see the logic? (i dont!) I dont know if they are actually gay there are just a lot of that type of work around (see dark angel and bobjim especially!)Do u have msn inn the US?
I'll let you know I'm as straight as a ruler, thank you.
( No, really ) The reason I write things here I wouldn't say is that people can missinterperate your words or meanings, or the aims of your poems. My poetry is funny as far as myself and my sad, lonely friends are concerned. If people don't like that, they get offended. On the site it doesn't impact on my good stuff as it is on another account. People find it hard to seperate a personality from a person. I can be funny and a bit sick or wierd, or serious and thoughtful, but people see a whole person, not the parts.
Dear lord, I'm sober.
Hey there is nothing wrong with being able to write things you'd never say. Trust me I'd never write half what I write if I was held accountable for every letter and space. Anyways Your preference of man or woman doesn't bother me in the least. Just be careful how far you let yourself slipt those personalities K? Cause Then you really will be two different artist.
Some how I do see the Logic. Chemistry isn't the type of subject you understand until 4 in the morning or the crack of dawn before exams(both only if your awake the night before). I'm not sure You mean the msn international news network? Yeah but I think its called something different.
well my chemistry is now done and handed in! i mean msn messenger its part of hotmail and is a form of instant messaging where u put in the persons email and if they have msn annd are online u can talk to them - im sure u have something similar!
i guess thats the good thing that this site allows people to express themselves in as many different ways as they want to and cannot be judged for it. (i have nothing against gays either btw i have had many-a lesbian pursuit! hehe (o:
Yeah I have Almost On Line(AOL)'s Instant Messenger(AIM for short). Other than yourself I don't know of anyone with With an MSN messenger. About the lesbian pursuits... So have I but in most cases no one calls it that case I'm a guy.
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well obviously its a UK thing then - most people have it over here! You must be writing/posting about one poem a day - i cant keep up! i will look at them now. Have you seen Strictly Ballroom? Great film im listening to the album -not my usual taste but very good - it was the only one in the store! here is a Kat. (spelt with a K coz thats my name) X
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I'm not sure. If I watched it, Its been awhile since I've seen it. I only write in spurts so don't be too alarmed. Pretty soon I'll unable to write anything for months. Right now I write about 2 poems for every 3 days and I post about three aweek.
/\ /\ / \/ \ * * " Here is a bunny. Not very cute but I call him Jason(thepinkfluffybunnyrabbitofdoom) just like me.
I like Greenday too, especially time of your life but it has so many associations i cry whenever i hear it! i see youve got MSN now - im very impressed! (im assuming ur name is Jason then) X
someone likes green day...
How ever did you know?? I do. In fact quite alarmingly so.
I wish this one's for me :S
wait, can I change the name to maria instead? -8- :)
Only if you change it from Vilanelle. Cause Maria throughs The ryhme off. But for you go ahead.
;)
Vilanelles would have to be French there so bloody complicated in my opinion. I am inexperienced with this genre of writing but know the basic laws to them. The subject matter is too teen angst but this may make a good lyric. I would have liked to have seen 'broken hearts DONT mend, it would have obliterated the obvious cliche. However my darling don't despair all this needs is a few drafts and touches of creative glitter and originality and you'll have it sparkling like the star you are.
Thank you so very much for your time in commenting on my work, I love you all the same on this site, it has been my pleasure meeting you. Goodbye. 6 317 view(s)
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But with all my heart I love you and so I beg"
these two lines need to rhyme with -ind as your others. then you'll be fine.