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Fifteen (Free verse) by Dovina
A recent downy mustache pushes forth upon his lip. A creep of jungle espaliers down his thigh, as wet-soil scent wafts musty from his coves— my changing playmate in the pomegranate tree. Something moves beneath me in the limb on which we sit late of afternoon of later summer. Red pomegranate berries change to purple juice, and distant mountain folds to wine-stained glow. It swings me limb to limb, throws my feet on rocky ground. I run as from an earthquake, afraid of what I’ll lose.

Up the ladder: When the night completes

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Posted: November 19, 2006 1:59 PM PST; Last modified: November 19, 2006 1:59 PM PST
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[8] INTRANSIT @ 65.31.112.143 | 20-Nov-06/4:36 PM | Reply
(new) downy mustache

something about the distant mountain folds- makes no sense to me. I'm assuming the pomegranate berries are your period/ovulation.

Why do you run and what exactly are you running from might flesh (no pun intended) this out .
[n/a] Dovina @ 70.38.78.229 > INTRANSIT | 20-Nov-06/4:40 PM | Reply
the tree is a real pomogranate tree, big enough to climb in, sit on its limbs and eat pomogranates. The distant mountains can be seen while in the tree, their folds (ridges and canyans) turn wine-purple in the evening.
[8] INTRANSIT @ 65.31.112.143 > Dovina | 20-Nov-06/4:46 PM | Reply
Pomegranate berries don't just turn to juice. Are you eating them?

the distant mountain (changes) canyOns. put down the gin and juice.
[n/a] Dovina @ 70.38.78.229 > INTRANSIT | 20-Nov-06/4:55 PM | Reply
Maybe you have never sat on the limb of a pomegranate tree, picking the big red fruit, stripping away the skin and the inner membranes that separate ranks of berries. They are very good when the juice squirts into you mouth as you chew them, spitting seeds onto the ground. They might be good with gin, I don't know.
[8] amanda_dcosta @ 61.17.22.38 | 24-Nov-06/8:31 AM | Reply
hmmm. not bad. I have never climbed a pomogranate tree although we have 'em here. But I can say its a very tasty fruit.
[n/a] Dovina @ 12.72.34.35 > amanda_dcosta | 25-Nov-06/7:36 PM | Reply
and a tasty memory too
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