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Distance (Free verse) by wilco The world is only a picture
of ordinary people
searching for the extraordinary.
Love is only a fixture
in romance novels
and poems with trains.
Distance is only a measure
of how badly
you want to see her.
Up the ladder:
Broken Sonnet
Down the ladder:
One True Instant
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 7.8
Posted: July 8, 2004 8:48 AM PDT; Last modified: July 8, 2004 8:48 AM PDTWeighted score: 6.4 Overall Rank: 783 Comments:
Verse 1 is a summation of the comments on Recyclet Stardust.
Verse 2 is anti-love Verse 3 is is a measure of love, and hard to associate with verse 2 Maybe love is the cliche, and this is the answer. Not bad.
INSIPID A delicate balancing act.
Almost. That first line troubles me. Sooooooooo, I'll will only vote a -10-
If you get really good people will slag this type of thing off as trite. Ignoring that criticism, I like the sounds. Especially picture and measure.
I don't think he's really in need of an uplifting statement like "If you get really good people will slag this type of thing off as trite." to reinforce his confidence.
What do you think?
probably not, is wilco a special case?
Not sure, you had me confused with your explainative take on my opinion. I had originally thought that he'd take it with a grain of salt really.
2 out of three aint bad - good stuff wilco.
Either of the last two stanza could be full blown poems with all the trimmings if you wanted. 326 view(s)
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Rude and happily profane,
Your ranker jester.
"If they invented a stealth-cow, that could climb trees and dig burrows, would you consider eating it?"
"If you could afford to employ a butler to wipe your bum, would you?"
"What if he was really intelligent, but the only thing he couldn't understand was bums and the wiping of bums?"
"So you'd let an intelligent wiper, who didn't understand bums or the wiping of bums, wipe your bum?"
"Given the isolation boothe scenario, would you prefer a retard wiper or an intelligent wiper who couldn't comprehend bums or the wiping of bums?"
"With an intelligent wiper who did not understand bums or the wiping of bums, you could discuss Important Matters Of The Towne whilst he wiped, provided those matters did not concern bums or the wiping of bums."