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Brush me away (Free verse) by nothingtoanyone

The last piece of my has broken into an unfixable size. An unneeded mess that lays scattered amongst the dust on the floor. Sweep my away as, I softly weep, I’ll pry as you sweep. Brush it all into a neat clean pile of vile rift raft. Into the dustpan and off to the trash never to be seen again only felt in the dark dang home that it once came from.

Fraser Allonby Q.C. 27-Apr-04/1:07 AM
This makes no sense whatsoever.

1. You appear to have omitted a word in line 1 between the words "my" and "has".

2. When you say, "broken into an unfixable size," do you actually mean, "broken into an unfixably small piece"?

3. You appear to have omitted a word in line 3 between the words "my" and "away".

4. When you say "rift raft," do you mean "riff raff"? If so, please consult a dictionary to discover the meaning of the phrase "riff raff" before reconsidering your use of the phrase.

5. When you say "dang," do you mean "dank"?

6. This poem fails.

7. You fail.

8. Q. E. D.

9. Thanks!

10. -10-




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